I’m enjoying taking part in the Writing 101: Poetry challenge, and I came to miss my daily prompt today, since there are apparently no classes at the weekend. I also miss an edge to the prompts offered, so I came up with my own subversive prompt.

The inspiration came to me when, perched at my balcony on the top floor in a block of flats, I observed successively a number of intoxicated individuals having a hard time trying to get home from their weekend drinking sessions.

I wrote the poem sober but formatted it drunk.

 

A drunk man

So gay

Sways like a poplar tree

Schemes to take over the world

Skids on the icy road

Falls and fails

To rise

Feeling not the cold

He falls

Asleep

And dies

Adead

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Posted by Mara Eastern

I'm a sardonic blogger, snapper, scribbler and rhymer; a virtual space invader who indulges in cheerful negativism, morbid self-deprecation and bleak humour.

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  1. And dies adead… Brilliant!

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    1. Thank you for thinking so high of my wordplay 🙂

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  2. I’m not a bad person for laughing, right?

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    1. I don’t think so, but I’m not the author 🙂 There is humour in everything if you know where to look !

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      1. Plus “gallows humour” is a very instinctive thing.

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        1. Gallows humour is the only kind I do 😀

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      2. I’ll second that! I find most humour in the least humorous situations.

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        1. Perhaps we have warped senses of humour 🙂

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          1. I certainly do! *warped laughter*

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    2. I’m not a bad person for taking so much pleasure in killing my characters, right 😉 ? You’re of course not a bad person, it was the idea to write a funny piece. After all, it’s so silly that it can’t be thought of as real!

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  3. From humor to suspense in such few words. Well done.

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    1. Thank you for your lovely comment. I appreciate that you took the time to read my little fun with words 🙂

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  4. Drunk formatting?! I’ll have to remember that – very effective 🙂

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    1. Haha, I’m glad that my drunkenness is inspiring 😉 I was having a lot of fun with this one.

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      1. Looked like it. I could see the teeter tottering in the formatting, lol.

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        1. Now I want to write a mock poem about a tottering teeter.

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          1. Look forward to that one 🙂

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    1. Thank you, Brett! I had a lot of fun with this 🙂

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  5. I can’t help thinking … Edward Lear 🙂

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    1. Yes, Edward Lear! And also Hugh MacDiarmid’s A Drunk Man Looks at the Thistle.

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  6. It’s so cool – love how you combine the swaying of him with the words being apart 😀 His death comes across less dramatic than the falling guy one – rather amusing here on this one 😉 Well done!

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    1. Yes, that was the idea, to come across as funny rather than tragic 😉 After all, my drunkard is a fictional character…

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      1. …and it definitely is easier to see comical stuff behind fictional characters of course… Well done 🙂

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  7. Brilliant, no doubt this will spring into mind next time I see a drunkard stumbling his way home!

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    1. Thanks for stopping by! I’m glad I somehow managed to a provide a fresh perspective on drunkards 😉

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  8. Haha I loved this one. Brilliant

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    1. Thank you 🙂 It was a wild (drunk) poetry experiment…

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