In response to Writing 101, Day 4: Seconds.

Four seconds

to impact

Free fall

from top floor

A change of heart

Now

Too bad

Too late

Impact

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Posted by Mara Eastern

I'm a sardonic blogger, snapper, scribbler and rhymer; a virtual space invader who indulges in cheerful negativism, morbid self-deprecation and bleak humour.

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  1. Morbid and beautiful. That’s a lovely poem, I could feel the impact.

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    1. You said it so nicely. Thank you a lot.

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      1. You’re very welcome.

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  2. hooklineandinkwell 10/12/2015 at 4:00 am

    Once you leap there is no turning back; you must fall. Only if you survive do you get a chance to make a change for another time. This is so great ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Thank you for your lovely comment! I’m glad my little morbid poem didn’t depress you ๐Ÿ™‚

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      1. hooklineandinkwell 12/12/2015 at 12:20 am

        You are welcome, Mara…I live on Earth, my friend, nothing depresses me anymore ๐Ÿ™‚ ๐Ÿ™‚

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        1. Excellent! That’s the spirit ๐Ÿ™‚

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          1. hooklineandinkwell 13/12/2015 at 11:41 am

            ๐Ÿ˜€ ๐Ÿ˜€

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  3. Hit me hard! Dark, I really love!

    Great short poem, you have!

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    1. A fellow dark side lover, excellent ๐Ÿ™‚ Thank you for stopping by and see you around in “class”!

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      1. Definitely! A lot of my previous posts are dark. I mean disturbingly dark! ๐Ÿ˜€
        See you!

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        1. Now I must read back through your blog! Disturbingly dark is enticing ๐Ÿ˜‰

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          1. Indeed! My recent posts are somehow a bit positive. But majority of my fictions for the past few months are really disturbing! ๐Ÿ˜€ I somehow signed out because its holiday! Haha

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          2. Oh don’t let holiday interfere with your dark side ๐Ÿ˜‰ I for one won’t…

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          3. Haha! Truly. My latest post for Day 6 is now, a bit, dark! (haha)

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          4. Yep. I’ve seen and appreciated your food for thought.

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  4. That was wicked! Changed his mind a little too late. Brilliant!

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    1. I like to torture my characters, apparently ๐Ÿ˜ฎ Thanks a lot for your lovely comment!

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      1. You are welcome ๐Ÿ˜‰

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  5. …wow… that must suck to be changing your mind during the fall :-/ !!! I’d imagine the fall being so nice and beautiful, with the wind in your hair, that you’d almost be thinking *once more!*… Too bad we’ll never know…

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    1. …btw – I can’t get your poem out of my head – I think I’d need to fill a page in my art journal with it ๐Ÿ˜‰ I also had to think of the French movie “hate” – do you happen to know it? It starts very dramatic – a voice telling a story about a man that falls from a tall building. The end of the story is unforgettable – the thoughts of the jumper get explained – wait, I found it here for you: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Uz9vgtXq_Hs

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      1. I’m genuinely sorry that you got my poem stuck in your head ๐Ÿ˜ฎ I hope my latest poem, also featuring a dead man, won’t give you more nightmares. I obviously love to kill my characters ๐Ÿ˜‰ The film you mention looks so interesting that I’ve just started downloading it to watch…

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        1. Oh no – don’t be sorry at all!!! That’s what art is all about – if you manage to touch somebody’s mind then you’ve done it very well, right ๐Ÿ™‚ ? Oh really? Fantastic!!! It’s SUCH a good dramatic movie and very weird and whimsical in its own way… Let me know what you thought of it, and enjoy it!!!

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          1. I only looked at the beginning of the movie so far, and it’s definitely whimsical, in a good way! I think I’ll like it ๐Ÿ™‚

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          2. There are many whimsical scenes in there… the cow, the old man in the toilet… ๐Ÿ˜‰ Enjoy the movie ๐Ÿ˜€

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          3. If I weren’t hooked before, I’d be now ๐Ÿ˜‰ !

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    2. It’s definitely an intriguing thought – to think what a person who jumps thinks and wonder if the jumper changes her/his mind or just “enjoys” the fall. And even worse when the jumper didn’t want to jump but fell accidentally. Now I’m scaring myself, ha…

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      1. Oh I totally get you!!! The thought always crosses my mind when standing next to high cliffs – what if the wind blows me off and I’m falling? Would I spend the last seconds freaking out or try to make the “best” out of it and “enjoy” what it’s like to fall freely…?! WICKED X-D !!!

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        1. I don’t think I want to find out so much ๐Ÿ˜‰

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    3. P.S. But we can always think the jumper was a bungee jumper!

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      1. …hmmmmmm… but I don’t think a bungee jumper would change his mind mid-way, do you ๐Ÿ˜‰ ?

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          1. …now you must overwrite the whole thing again, that doesn’t work… ๐Ÿ˜‰ Just kiddin’

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